godofeng

del左 仲推舊文-,-

[ 本帖最後由 godofeng 於 2013-4-10 02:30 PM 編輯 ]

bo2012

i guess it's a 5, but cant get to 5*

edward_chan

1.run-on setence2.係咁LOOP你D理論,0 PROVE
**3.成篇擺明喺度夾硬砌長D SETENCE,

"好"很"多無意義既

贅字

我唔明點解可以拎LV5,根據咩黎評分呢?
LV2-3, 到底你知唔知咩係debate speech

godofeng

求指教
btw篇野debate類型我參考美國Yale大學prof教 essay既形式x_x

[ 本帖最後由 godofeng 於 2013-2-19 11:34 PM 編輯 ]

christinali

用字準確好過好多人la~~ 不過真係悶 似LS
同埋有d句子可以簡短 d
e.g.
the fisson of an atom of uranium produces several million times the energy produced by the combustion of an atom or carbon from coal 可以改成

The energy produced by nuclear fission is more than that produced by combustion of coal, by million, million and million times.

[ 本帖最後由 christinali 於 2013-2-19 11:42 PM 編輯 ]

godofeng

By millions of times<<<得吾得?

nodyyu89

vocab is not enough

洗頭用飄柔

寫英文變左寫化學,你估markers點睇?

godofeng

Debate本來就係引用例子説服
marker吾識睇通常都會check意思,btw 英文就是這樣子吧,dont restrict English.

Iisher

655 Overall : Lv5
You tend to show off your complex sentence structures but it seems to be a bad tactic in terms of grammatical correctness and presentation of idea.
Good luck!

godofeng

x_xwhat complex sentence structures...
tho i agree that my sentences r a bit long

Iisher

Ys, they make your compo clumsy and not reader-friendly
btw, I thought I was a bit demanding...5* should be okay ge

mcmancm

why is this post popping up again and again and again and again?
it's written like centuries ago.
i thought by now godofeng you should hv made some progress and produced tonnes of really stunning essays... instead of digging into the same one.... (which btw i hv already lost interest in ages ago).

improvement is also about quantity...

the more you write and share, the more discoveries you will make.

godofeng

I dunno,people kept digging the post up,was busy these days.I was thinking of posting up a few essays I did in my free time,just that oral practices and regular revision kept me busy~maybe I'll post them up tmr,rmb to check,i like the way u criticize my written English

mcmancm

no need to rush ge... just share it when u feel like to la. after all it's your own schedule that matters.

小祭`

略睇完
都ok content 唔錯
句子大致都順,但有d句子真系太過長(雖然長,但我個人認為唔難理解)
其實冇話寫長句唔得, 但重點系要易明
我覺得樓主寫d長句唔算太難明 所以可以接受
用字都ok